literature

little things

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Such a little thing really
              a love
      like a passing smile
it flits to and fro
between
             each and the next
             one and the other
      making them     
somehow amazing
somehow perfectly
                                beautiful
perfectly
                                sweet
and briefly
each remembers why they
haven't given up
on the little things
that we keep in our
    -hearts-
but cannot bear
to give to those
we see as others,

why we haven't given up on all our little things.
experimenting with pushing the words around, do you guys think the spacing adds to this poem or is superfluous?

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I like the spacing, but It should be more consistent.